I agree with you GG. I've always wish I could be a better writer.
That was really well done. Obviously I am a terrible writer, I basically write out my thoughts as it streams from my head.
I loved the way you described the fighter. I have just read Gatsby and while I am not saying you are Fitzgerald level it is that same style of descriptive writing.
gamingeek said:Your writing is very rhythmic, each sentence somehow manages to be about the same length. Was this intentional? It's kind of addictive to keep reading.
Not at all intentional, I had to go back and read it again with this in mind. More full stops were intentional, as I have a tendency to overuse hyphens and semi-colons. Maybe the rhythm comes from a penchant for poetry 
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^I read the fighter one. Wasn't it completed? It read like a very short story/flash fiction to me, not the beginning to something longer. Nice work, Yoda.
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Tell me to get back to rewriting this site so it's not horrible on mobileYeah, it seemed like they were the begining of a longer story. I'm not all that familiar with flash fiction, as the shortest short stories I've read were at least ten pages. I'll definitely keep reading, Yoda.
I have posted my first one that I did the other day, but will keep it on a separate blog so as to not spam the blog listings. You can read them at MyPerspicacity.
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